第四部分 书面表达

第一节 情景作文

一、样文参考

Last Monday, we were having our Chinese class when the teacher suddenly slipped and fell. We were all worried about her. One of the boys carried her on the back, with the help of some others, to the clinic immediately. It turned out that her right leg was broken and she had to stay in the hospital. The following day, we went to visit her with flower and fruit. Seeing her lying in bed with her leg wrapped in bandages, we felt sorry for her and hoped that she would recover soon. This Thursday she returned to the class on a wheelchair to give us lessons. We were all deeply moved and proud of having such a responsible teacher.

二、语言剖析

1. 词汇分析

① slip and fall意为“滑倒”，考生要多掌握日常生活中的动词，且注意平时积累。

② with the help of some others是典型的with结构，表示“在其他一些人的帮助之下”。考生在表示“在…帮助下”时，也可以使用with the help of...结构。例如：

我借助字典翻阅英文杂志。

I read English magazines with the help of a dictionary.

③ turn out表示“证明是，结果是”，常见句型为“It turns/ed out that...”。例如：

结果我发现我认识那个中枪的人。

It turned out that I knew the person who got shot.

④ her leg wrapped in bandages意为“脚上绑着绷带”。

⑤ be deeply moved表示“被深深打动”。

2. 句型分析

We were all deeply moved and proud of having such a responsible teacher.

这句话可作为情景作文结尾表达心情、升华主题之用，句型be proud of sth./doing sth.意为“为…感到骄傲”。类似的句型还有：

人+ be + adj.（或人+ be +过去分词）and proud of doing sth. 例如：

我非常高兴，并且为我们在郊区植树而感到自豪。

I was very delighted and proud of planting trees in the suburbs.

三、全文评析

四幅图的情景作文属于历年北京卷考查的重点。2011年情景作文难度适中，考点分布与往年基本一致。今年考查的是老师不小心摔倒、学生送老师去医院的情景作文。写作时需注意以下几点：情景作文的体裁是记叙文，时态使用一般过去时，由于此次考题没有给出开头和结尾，因此新颖的开头和结尾能够成为写作亮点。每幅图的具体内容为：①老师摔倒；②我们送老师去医务室；③我们看望病床上的老师；④老师坐轮椅给我们上课。考生需把握要点，并注意每幅图中的具体细节，加上漂亮的语言，都能得到不错的分数。

第二节 开放作文

一、样文参考

In the picture, there stands a tree full of fruit on one side of the stream. Across the stream, a man is trying to reach out on the edge of the bank for the fruit with a net attached to a pole. Not far away there is a bridge that can lead him to the tree for more fruit.

The message conveyed in the picture is clear. In pursuing a dream, we might focus on only one way of making it come true, forgetting that there may be alternatives. As indicated in the picture, if the man is willing to look for other possibilities, he can find a better and more rewarding way to achieve his goal. All he has to do is to turn around, cross the bridge and walk to the tree.

二、语言剖析

1. 词汇分析

①stream，名词，表示“河流；小溪”，考生在描述图画时应使用恰当的词汇。

②reach out，动词词组，表示“伸出”。

③attach to，动词词组，表示“系上，粘上，附着在…上”，attach to也可以用于抽象名词，例如：

学习英语很重要。

We should attach importance to learning English.

④alternative，名词，表示“可供选择的事物；其他方式”。

⑤indicate，动词，表示“表明；指示；暗示”。

2. 句型分析

In the picture, there stands a tree full of fruit on one side of a stream.

倒装句作为一种特殊句式，在写作中属于加分句型的一种，类似的句子还有：

Here comes the bus.

There goes the bell.

三、全文评析

2011年北京卷开放作文与2010年相比，题型一致，考查议论文，图中一个人在河对岸够对面的果实，但离他不远处就有一座桥。本题考查话题为成功与失败，考生从成功或失败这两个角度立意均可。若选择从成功的角度入手，立意可以是做事要寻求正确的方法，不要忽视其他的可能；若从失败的角度入手，立意可以是若忽视了其他的可能方法而舍近求远，结果只能是失败。因此，考生在立意正确的基础上，再对图画进行细致完整的描述和合理的论证，都能得到不错的分数。