第四部分 写作

第一节 情景作文 (20分)

一、样文参考

Last weekend, I helped my grandparents prepare their trip to Beidaihe. On Saturday morning, together with my grandparents, I searched the Internet for the train schedule, the weather in Beidaihe, and some hotel information. In the afternoon, I went to the train station and managed to buy two tickets for my grandparents although there was a long queue. After dinner, I packed into the suitcase the things my grandparents need, such as clothes, glasses, an umbrella, and a map. The next morning, I went to the station to see them off. Waving goodbye to them on the platform, I felt happy for them and wished them a safe journey.

二、语言剖析

1. 词汇分析

①manage to do sth.:成功做某事。根据图画特征,能看出“我”是在排了长长的队伍之后才买到票的,manage to这个词组在这里使用,表达更加灵活,比直接说bought two tickets生动得多。

②pack into:塞满,塞进。如果要表达“把某物塞进…”,可以说pack sth. into ...或者pack into... sth.。如:I cannot pack any more clothes into the suitcase, for it is full. 这衣箱已经满了,我无法再塞进衣服了。

③see sb. off:送行,送别。

④wave goodbye to sb. 向某人挥手告别。

⑤platform 月台,站台。

2. 句型分析

...although there was a long queue.

although引导的让步状语从句,由于前面使用了manage to do这样的词组,所以使用although要比使用after更生动形象。

Waving goodbye to them on the platform, I felt happy ...

本句使用了现在分词作状语的结构。在高考写作中,非谓语结构属于较高级的语法结构,应该学会使用。这句话中的现在分词做的是伴随状语的成分,除此之外,现在分词还可以在句中做原因状语、时间状语、让步状语、条件状语等,如:

Being very weak, she could not move.

由于过于虚弱,她无法行走。(原因状语)

Seeing the cat, the mouse ran off.

当看到猫,老鼠跑了。(时间状语)

Although living miles away, he still went to school.

虽然住在几英里之外,他仍去上学。(让步状语)

Working hard, you will succeed.

如果努力工作,你就会成功。(条件状语)

三、全文评析

这幅看图作文题目是一幅比较常规的作文,与往年的题目类似,文章难度不大。不过,本篇看图作文的细节较多,如第1幅图的3个问号,第2幅图的“长队”,第3幅图的物品,这些都是需要在写作的时候体现出来的。另外,4幅图的比重不一,可以分为两大部分:

第一部分:图1~3,记叙的准备过程。

第二部分:图4,“我”送“爷爷奶奶”出行。

10年的看图作文让我们看到了命题者对看图作文的热衷,北京卷连续4年出现了看图作文,所以考生应该在日后的学习中,重点加强对看图作文的训练。

第二节 开放作文 (15分)

一、样文参考

In the picture, between two closely-located buildings grows a big tree. Unlike most trees, this one ①bends in the middle, struggling all the way up to get more sunshine. The picture reminds me of ②those who succeed in ③unfavorable conditions. Faced with difficulties, they never give up but try their best to find a way out. Life can be hard. But if we have the courage and ④determination, we will finally get the sunshine we want as the tree in the picture does.

二、语言剖析

1. 词汇分析

①bend:弯曲,屈身。

②those who:…的人。中文里出现的“人”,英文可以用代词those来翻译。比如:God helps those who help themselves. 天助自助者也。

③unfavorable:不利的,不适宜的。如:the unfavorable weather 不利天气。除此之外,unfavorable还有一个意思,即“相反的,反对的”,如:an unfavorable opinion反对意见,成见。

④determination:决定,决心。如:with great determination 坚定信心。

2. 句型分析

...between two closely-located buildings grows a big tree...

这是一个完全倒装句,表示方位或方式的介词或副词位于句首,句子需要完全倒装,即把动词完全提到主语之前。如:At the next station, in came an aged woman.

不过需要注意的是,只有当主语不是代词的时候,句子才能用完全倒装。如:

Here it is. 句子主语是代词it,所以句子不倒装。

三、全文评析

这篇开放作文难度一般,只要学生能把握住树、楼和太阳之间的关系,就能比较容易地看出文章的含义。不过,需要注意一点,本图中,树和楼之间没有亲子关系。一旦把楼看成树的父母,那么这篇作文的走向就错了。至于写作方面,由于没有出现像08年“圆规”,09年“叉子”、“筷子”这类比较生僻的词语,所以写起来还是比较容易的。